Ok... Since I started writing poems recently, I decided to open a topic for my self where I'll store all of them.
Comments are going to be very appreciated. Feel free to give oppinions, praise or criticism.


So... I'll post my first song once again, so everything will be on one place.

The first one: It's the one I wrote for someone. I think it's the best of the all I have written so far

Song of a bird

Sitting on the balcony during spring afternoon,
Absorbing the gentle rays of the sun.
Smelling the exotic scents in the air,
Seeing an innocent bird on a tree.
Hearing a song...like of an angel

The spirit raises us high up to the sky!

Love is like a song of a bird
Restless harmonies get carried by the wind,
Entering our soul graspingly.
Burning secretly like a camp fire…
…with a shy, modest flame.

The time heads forward like a spinning wheel!

The waves on summer are waving playfully
The flame, restlessly turns into a wildfire…
…a fire, that unstoppable force, like a spredding voice.
Telling everything, rushing everywhere,
Rejecting to be stopped.

Where is it going? Will it ever stop burning?

Sitting on a balcony, gazing at the sky.
The sun is setting, calmly with a sign…
…a sign of an ending…
Engulfed with a persistantly burning fire, uncapable to stop
We search for help, hoping for the best.

Is the solution ever to be found?

A twinkling star appears… shining brightly… never dissapearing
Like the wishes of our hearts.
The sea is peaceful, without waves.
The song of the bird still echoes in our being,
The fire burns passionately…wildly…resisting the squeeze of the spinning wheel…

…But, will the star shine again? Misteriously, jet so volouptously like a song of a bird.


Now the second one. It isn't dedicated or written for anybody. It's a light-hearted little poem written just for the sake of writing.


Desire


A desire to fly
To see the unseen
To touch the sky
To see the star shine

A desire to search
To discover the world
To cruise with my wings
To roam like a bird

A desire to touch
To feel the unfelt
To smell the scents
Of the pretty plants

A desire to dream
To love and to be loved
To run
And never to be stopped!...

Never to be stopped on the endless search
On my way towards the end of the road
To discover the emotions hidden in your heart

On my way I found your heart
Stole a glimpse of your eyes
Smiled brightly
Disappeared lightly.

I flew away freely like a bird, leaving no traits behind!

When I looked at your eyes
I saw the hidden truth inside
Discovered the depths behind
The mysterious light

Reminescing about
the haunting nostalgia
I fell in love
But never been loved.

It’s the only wish that remains
Stucked in the heart like a pearl in the sea
Burried deeply
Waiting to be freed…

It’s my only desire!


Now the third one. I don't think it's a good poem, but nonetheless, here it goes:

Reflection- Affection


Two pairs of shoes
Standing on the carpet
One bootle of booze
Lying on the floor

A large mirror is set in the room
Reflecting the siluette of
two people
Standing, wrapped in a shadow


I payed you a visit
You payed me a drink.
I made a cake
You made a mistake

I stole your wallet
You stole my heart
With a fast pace
Like it was a race

A two sided bed
With only one blanket
Stands isolated in the room
The glow of the moon reflects upon it.

I look at your eyes
Witnessing the hidden beauty
Trying to unfold the secret.

You look at my soul
After you pierced it apart,
Now trying to put it together
In one piece like that mirror

I asked for an answer
You asked for my hand
I gave you a smile
You gave me a ring


You broke a promise
I broke the bottle
It lies on the floor torn into
Pieces like my soul.

Coldness enters into the room.!

I cried, full of grief
You cried full of tears.
I played a fair game
You played it all wrong.

The past reflects on our future
Like the moon reflects upon our heads
The mirror reflects our feelings
We are just human beings!

Here! I give you this blanket.
You just give me that sweet word
I want to hear.
Sweet like that champagne we drank once.

I could see it all,
Just by looking at your eyes once.
Your feelings are reflected on
Their surface, on
Those eyes which could never lye.

Love is in the air,
Surrounded by petals
Of forgiveness,
Gently touching our hearts,
Like the spring rain
Touches the ground.
While the flowers have already bloomed,
Facing the rising sun on the sky.
----------------------------------------------------------------. I wanted to make this poem humorous, but I messed it up a lot,lol.


And now the fourth one. I wrote it for the same person as in the first one. I finished it a few minutes ago, as I'm typeing this.
I got inspired to write this poem because of some " talk" I had with the friend.
I ended up asking questions to myself, and I was ( and still am) uncertain about some things going on, so I got inspired
to write a poem. Ok, enough ramble, here it goes:


Uncertanities

I could never see your smile,
Or the shimmering of your blue eyes
Nor I could hear your sorrow
…just the kind words you told.


I felt your keen emotions
Reaching deep inside my heart.

The joyful feeling
Shook my being
Like the grass trembles
From the passing breeze


I know you never
Returned my love
But friends we were
That’s for sure.


My soul was covered by a blindfold
Following only the call of hope…
Fighting against the cruel destiny,
Trying to reach your far away shores


…Only to be able to see you!

You always kept the door
To your heart wide open
But now it’s tight shut…
Unreachable, like the
Stardust from the sky,
Fallen from above the
Place where you belong.

I cannot feel the confiding
touch of your words anymore,
Or any glimpse of caring
From the long passed seasons

Why does it have to be so confusing?

Uncertainties keep twisting
Around, endlessly inside the whirlpool
Undecided where to flow
…unable to embark to a coast

Sailing on different roads
We drifted apart…
Forever separated by the distance,
I couldn’t do anything except to love.

Both of us cried a river of tears
Spent our lives lying on a beach
Longing for that special moment to live in
Searching for that special someone to be with.

Rowing on the river of fate,
You found a girl who deserves your love
But, another person already stole her heart
You couldn’t do anything but to love.

The merciless flow of time
Washed away the paintings we drew…
The endless creativity of our imagination
Now belongs to the past.

Give me the key to
Unlock the secrets of life
To find the way towards happiness…
To return back where we were…
To nurture back something precious,
Which only belonged to us
Something certain, which even the passing time
Shouldn’t be able to erase.

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It's a bit strange poem. I hope I haven't put some words on wrong places, or failed to guess their meaning.
And also forgive me on the spelling errors I made in the poems and my post. Feel free to correct me.

Thanks for reading people, and I hope they were at least enjoyable.

'Traits' should be 'trails', if I get the meaning correctly.




Just a small typing error, but thought I'd point it out anyway...It should be spelled 'silhouette', just in case you might want to change it...




Again, just a little spelling error. It should be spelled 'lie'.

Despite those few errors, I thought these were really well done! The flow in them was really nice, and they were just well done all together. I can't really think of anything else to say other than good job!

Thanks a bunch for correcting me and the praise. I really appreciate that you took the time to read through them carefully. I'm glad you liked them.

Ok, here's another poem I wrote yesterday after becoming furious because of one person's behaviour.

Any comments and critiques are very appreciated. I hope you'll like it people.


Tears

Across the path towards my lips
A tear slid, full of grief.
My eyes are now wet
I cannot see anymore well.

Only a sickness can make me blind
Who ever told you that, it’s a lie.
My eyes were covered with your past deeds.
Now my vision is perturbed because of your deceive.

Dissapointment is tearing my soul apart.
I deserve a better attitude from your part.
Now I can cry,… and regret that we had ever even met.
Maybe I would feel happier… never speaking to you again.

I better stop deceiving myself
God knows it’s impossible to act that way.
Only oblivion can cure the pain inside my heart
Maybe then I would forget what you have done.

Like a heavy rain, the tears are falling down my face.
Slowly losing touch with reality…
Wanting to resurrect few valuable moments…
Reassuring myself, that you are still the same…
Exploding from desire to return back in time
To harmoniously dream away my life.

Weeping alone in a hospital
Struggling from pain…
-You never seemed to care.
Words hurt more than a punch.
Your ignorance pierced right through my heart.

My eyes are red, as if a petal of a rose covers it’s surface
Persistingly iches, like a spike from the same
Rose dagged itself deep inside
From a rose you would never buy…
… Buy for me, to feel that you are still beside…

…beside me, so I can express once again
My honest feelings of love towards you
My confession would be sour,
Even more sour than the strongest acid.
Like the one falling from the rain,
Those raindrops which resemble my tears.

That was really powerful Gelmar! I can’t imagine what you were going through yesterday...As a poem it’s really good I think. The imagery is fantastic. Though, I guess that could be a two-edged compliment in a way, since this was a real life scenario, or at least the feelings were from one...But, I think this was a good poem!

Thanks a lot for your rewiev. I'm glad you like the poem.

I wrote another one recently. It is suppoused to be abstract. It isn't dedicated to anyone, though I thought about few people. It speaks about friends who suddenly start abandoning you, without a real reason. And we don't know why that happened. I once had a friend who I have known for around 7-8 years. We were good friends until a year ago. And he started abandonig me and my another friend.
Btw. the end is brutal. I invented that, because I had no other ideas, not because I want to kill someone ( I'm saying this, so you wouldn't think I'm a psycho) Also, while I was writing, I thought about Dante's Divine Comedy a little. Ok, here's the poem:

You are slowly walking away

Twisting in the vortex of emotions:
Anxiety, misery, disappointment, misunderstandings and confusion…
…never seem able to fade away in time.

Focusing on the elegant flow of music,
Following it’s rhythm…
Desperately running towards the melody
To search for the peace I yearn so much for…
…once and for all, to rest and ask
To bow my head towards the answers I get…
…get from life.

Cutting through my way
The music faded away
Surrounded by silence
I was engulfed with awe…

The holy silence
Granted a tiny bit of my wish
Caressed my face gently
Making me to fall asleep.

Heaven, it certainly couldn’t be,
The place where I entered in.
Familiar faces formed a circle…
…sitting all around me.

Leaving those people to face their sins…
Running away from the pit
I was suddenly kissed by the feeling of peace.

Hearing the flow of a stream
I stepped closer to it,
Clear like a mirror,
Clean like a newborn
it served as a cradle for many rocks.

The vibrant colors on their surface faded away.
Washed away by the time, they turned pale.
Rolled, rolled and now suddenly stopped
Emprisoned forever, became the slaves of love
They slipped, and now lay trapped
Appealing-like almost dead.

The wonderful past disappeared right in front of my eyes,
Stepped away from the path of my life.
I still follow the road of misgivings
Bravely fighting battles with your deeds.

The sword cut through my neck
You are slowly walking away.
Step by step, you are leaving behind…
Why? I’m- afraid to ask
You scare me, and it became more than a task.

You are slowly walking away,
Leaving deep scars on your comrades
Making us wonder forever in awe
What has caused the changes in your pace.

You are slowly walking away
Almost never reaching out your hand anymore
We are trying to understand in vain
But you fail to recordnize our pain

Speachless, you continue to fade away
Even your smile disappeared…
Or did it turn invincible?

You are slowly walking away
Rolling, rolling like a rock,
Appearing so hard,
Acting very strong.

You are slowly walking away,
Coldhearted- Oh, what have you become?
Encountering you has became colder than ever before.
Like an ice you freeze the hearts of your slaves
Who were loyal to you until the very end.

You are slowly walking away,
I can hardly see the glimpse still left behind…
Of the image I worshipped all the time.
Blurry,like the mud deep down in river,
Appears in front of my eyes…
Never shining again with a charm.

You are slowly walking away,
Without hint, you are now far
Give me a word-should I fight
Or to leave you miserably die?...

You are going to turn pale like the rocks,
Chased by time, you’ll fall apart,
No one will help you stand up anymore
Your face will forever be burried inside the dirt of a mud.

Twisting in the vortex of emotions:
Anxiety, misery, disappointment, misunderstandings and confusion…
…never seem able to fade away in time
I finally dared to cross the stream,
I slipped, fell and never woke up again.

Your poems are really well done! I dunno, the words you use to describe everything is well chosen and...I just like them as a whole =) I envy your poetic abilities, to be honest. But, good work! I hope to see more sometime =)

I'm glad you like this one too. There's nothing to be envious about. You also write good poetry. Plus, you get the advantage, because you have a lot wider vocabulary than I do. I often remembert the word in Serbian, and I have to look it up in the dictionary.

Thanks for the comment. I appretiate it.

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I like the meanings, but there is...lack of rthym. But that's a pet peeve of mine. Poems don't necessarly need to ryhm. You vocab in the english language has become quite excellent.

You mean lack of rythm, or rhyme? I think the rythm is not the same in all the parts of the poems. Probably because not all the verses contain the same number of rows and such. I guess I have to improve that part about writing. I'm glad you like the meanings. That's the most important factor of my poems.
Hmm... so in the end you tell me that it doesn't have to rhyme neccesarily. So, you probably meant " rythm" in the beginning.
Lol, and before you compliment my vocab, what does " pet peeve" mean? I really don't understand that expression.

Thanks for the comment. It's appreciated

err I mean just ryhming.

Pet Peeve is like a standard you set. It's not going to be quite perfect to the observer unless that something is there or isn't there.

Oh, now I understand what you meant. Thanks for explaining. I was just a bit confuzed about " the rhyme" stuff, because you made a typo, so I didn't know what you meant. Thanks for explaining.

Finally, I wrote another poem. I haven't written anything since August until now. I wanted to make something simple, but it turned out to be complicated. Hope you like it, and any comments are appretiated.

Passing by…

Here I am, once again
Circling around the remains of life’s simplicity.
Those circles, which decrease day by day.
In a spark of a moment, the complex emotions surpass the beauty of calmness;
…as I’m passing by… passing by…

In a manner of a black cat, out of nowhere, unexpected
He appears, misfortune’s foreteller ,
Awakening inner lust, and a shy outer blush
invoking my fantasy to lush even further into the unreachable sky
provoking me to become a thief…
while I’m trying to grab an exciting moment of inattention,
to steal a glimpse of his silhouette
…as he is passing by…passing by

The innermost feelings
Overflow the heated body
Conquering all senses
The heartthrobs are the soul’s fragile voice.

Time is a faceless liar
An unstopping force it represents
Always hasty, no matter what it says
It keeps running, never ceasing to exist.
Oh it’s already passing by the gate of hopes!
Forcefully shutting it, leaving sadness and happy moments behind.
Summoning an unpredictable fog around us.

Unpredictable he is, like a butterfly swaying in the breeze
Lies and truth in an interlude…dancing in the parade
Forming a grotesque masquerade
Untouchable, NO, NO, NOT….diving in shallow waters, the answer suddenly overflowed
…but it was too late, he had already flown away, towards someone else’s hands.
Just about the time the thruths were
Passing by… passing by…

Drowned in mad pain, the moon’s rays enlightened my way, towards the surface of the lake.
Eternally, love matters complicated will be,
But simple tenderness is what I now need.

In the small circle, I have finally found simplicity.
Valuable like a golden treasure chest.
You were always there for me!
Your sincere smile, has approached my heart.
Caring, friendly, stay by my side!
Demanding mercy from time, to stop, and make you my guide.

Uncertain about your life,
Wishing you are still waiting for the train to arrive.
I don’t want to miss you!...
…like I missed the train yesterday
Which was…
…passing by…passing by.

This, I think, is one of the best you’ve done =). The emotion you layer in with this, hidden under the description and overall imagery, is quite nice. What I basically mean by that is that as I read it, there’s an underlying emotion coming out to me through the words, even if you don’t actually say it. It’s a sad poem about the lost moments in life and how the course of time can change/effect people. Of course, that’s a very abbreviated description of the poem (how I took it in, not sure if it’s how you meant it...). If I really went into depth about it, it would probably take up (for me) an entire page on this forum board (or screen, whatever you’d call it), haha. But yes, nicely done =). Glad to see you’re back in the writing business =p.

Thanks a lot for your comment. I'm very glad you like it, and it's an honour for me that you think it's one of the best, and that you took time to interpret it deeply.
You mostly guessed it's meaning. Though, when I write, I always think about the way to tell some happening in my life, which invoke important emotions in me. And later on, I fix it, add few rhymes and such, to make it an actual poem.

And by the description of time, I also meant how it changes circumstances in life, along with what you said, that it changes people and the things around you.

Once again, thanks a lot.